Ocian I see a lot of evidence where you are taking risks with language. You are also consistent with basic punctuation. This is great. Keep it up. As you gain confidence, really decide what you want your writing to focus on. You can move away from using firstly, secondly in recount writing as you are confident with grouping your main ideas.
Ocian I see a lot of evidence where you are taking risks with language. You are also consistent with basic punctuation. This is great. Keep it up. As you gain confidence, really decide what you want your writing to focus on. You can move away from using firstly, secondly in recount writing as you are confident with grouping your main ideas.
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ReplyDeleteThis is great Ocian. I really enjoyed the amount of detail you put in this.
ReplyDeleteThis is great Ocian. I really enjoyed the amount of detail you put in this.
ReplyDeletei love this story i can tell you put a lot of work into this and they way u used an abbreviation of unboring words is awesome!!!!
ReplyDeleteThat was a really good story and funny and i like the words that you used in the first paragraph
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